Comments for the top one: write "I am a cog" only once in bigger writing to avoid too much repetition. I don't know it we need the second and last phrase - find it is a little re-iterating. Keep some white space as there will be more going on on the board. i think one line, maybe more as an asymmetric border will do just to avoid competing with the on-goings on the board? s
Seems unfinished, i'm not sure if they are or not. Just feels like each element was just plastered on the page and not necessary thought about too much even though there is clearly different columns for each element --- did i articulate that well?
comments for second one - same as for the other info - write I am a cog a little bigger so that it counts for all points. Maybe we should think of another wording than "I am" - maybe think of more word connected to relationship, association or connectedness rather than self- proclaiming. Things like adopt, share, use, take care of... I need to think about it a little. Also - don't think it is necessary to re-iterate from the other side that it is for a good cause. Think this board can show the theme connections that we came up with right from the beginning so that we establish shape and task/meaning. Again - the lines can be toned down so they don't disturb the main ones that will be on the board.
Thanks Solveig, it's always good when people make comments that actually help the project move in the right direction rather than being negative at someones preliminary ideas. I like the simplified cogs as well, they echo the charities. That creepy guy is Block Watch... but I like your spies not allowed!
Hi Bree
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write "I am a cog" only once in bigger writing to avoid too much repetition. I don't know it we need the second and last phrase - find it is a little re-iterating. Keep some white space as there will be more going on on the board. i think one line, maybe more as an asymmetric border will do just to avoid competing with the on-goings on the board?
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Seems unfinished, i'm not sure if they are or not. Just feels like each element was just plastered on the page and not necessary thought about too much even though there is clearly different columns for each element --- did i articulate that well?
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ReplyDelete- same as for the other info - write I am a cog a little bigger so that it counts for all points. Maybe we should think of another wording than "I am" - maybe think of more word connected to relationship, association or connectedness rather than self- proclaiming. Things like adopt, share, use, take care of... I need to think about it a little. Also - don't think it is necessary to re-iterate from the other side that it is for a good cause. Think this board can show the theme connections that we came up with right from the beginning so that we establish shape and task/meaning. Again - the lines can be toned down so they don't disturb the main ones that will be on the board.
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BTW - love the cog simplifications that you've illustrated! Don't get the one with "spies not allowed" looking image?!
ReplyDeleteThanks Solveig, it's always good when people make comments that actually help the project move in the right direction rather than being negative at someones preliminary ideas.
ReplyDeleteI like the simplified cogs as well, they echo the charities.
That creepy guy is Block Watch... but I like your spies not allowed!
I'm sorry Bree -- did that come across as negative? That wasnt my intent! I was just unsure if its finished or not, and was hoping for a response :)
ReplyDeleteSorry! :) And yes your logos for the charities do look awesome!